Re-working the last 2 pages... any thoughts? I took out 6 lines from page 30, because otherwise it would have been too much text in comparison to the rest of the story. They were important, but slightly irrelevant and not absolutely necessary.
Now my questions are:
1. On page 30, is the word bizarre too complicated for young children?
2. Does it seem like the hippo calling the others seemingly "bizarre" is a step backward after the lesson we just learned from the story?
3. On the final line, which fits better?
"I am happy to be me"
"I am glad to just be me"
"I am best when I am me"
"I am choosing to be me."
4. (5 hours later) WHAT ABOUT THIS for pg 30???--I wrote brand new last 2 lines:
Upside down is not for me,
and I don’t like to climb, you see.
Today I think that I would rather
swim and watch the fishes gather.
As I float on my backside,
you’re welcome to come catch a ride.
I won't say “You should you should!”
I'll let you choose it, if you would.
We're different, true, from near and far.
But I like you the way you are.