You Should You Should: "Sales Hook"

Christopher Robbins, (my publisher at www.Familius.com) is asking us to write up all the marketing material now.  So I'm trying to write the "Sales Hook" and wondered if you could give me any feedback.  It's hard!!  (Newcomers may read the original story here.)

Here is what he gave me as an example:

Sales Hook: <short one sentence elevator pitch. Example: A former high-school principal provides successful strategies to motivate kids to succeed in school.

Here's what I have:

Hippo isn't sure how to be himself when friends say, “You should walk like me! Sing like me! Dance like me! You should! You should!”

I wanted to leave a little bit of an open end... room for "I wonder what happens" even though you know a children's book always gets resolved.  Anyway.  What do you think???

Here are variations bouncing around my head:

Hippo questions how to be...

Hippo wonders how to be...

Hippo wishes to be himself but pestering friends say...

Hippo wishes to do things his way and be himself but pestering friends say...

Thoughts?

"Kitty Wants" App is Published in iTunes!!

Hi!!!!!  I'm really excited and happy and humbled and a little bit tickled to announce....

.......As of Dec 20th my little story app "Kitty Wants" (created in my Children's Book Illustration class this past semester) is published in the App Store on iTunes for iPad/iPhone!  Yup, and it's only $0.99.  Here's the link:

https://itunes.apple.com/us/app/kitty-wants-story-how-kitty/id588019727?mt=8  

Sketch: Reindeer Headstand

Black Watercolor Pencil

I love him.  

:)

Digital: Good news, sad news

Good news:
This isn't finished, but I wanted to show you what I've got so far digitally!  You like?  Here's the thing... I love looking through a sketchbook and at drawings far more than looking at paintings.  And I love drawing way more than painting.  So... wondering if I can preserve the drawing/sketching/penciling/lining part of the work and also bring in bright vibrant color at the same time.  Like I said this isn't finished... but this is certainly exciting, fun, semi-addicting... which WHO KNEW..., and I'm far happier with the results and process, and guess what... I've been dreaming about painting digitally at night.  I'm all excited.  I had no idea I'd enjoy it this much.  My tablet still hasn't even come in the mail yet but I used the school tablets to make this.

Sad news:
Sad news is... I talked to my respectable advisor yesterday, and looks like switching to digital like this is most likely not an option.  I might have cried a little in his office.  Poor guy probably gets that a lot because I discovered an appreciated box of tissues at arm's length.  I'm very bummed.  But, I must do what I must do.  At least I know something I didn't know before, that I can take with me to use in future work.  So I guess it still kinda ends with good news again.  But yeah... bummer.

12/12/12 Sketch (Dec. 12, 2012)

Decided I need... no no no WANT... to start drawing for fun again!

Here's my sketch for today.

(even though I really drew him a couple days ago... shhh)

Hm... what should his name be...

(Ball point pen)

Want to Preview "Kitty Wants?!"

Who wants to preview my entire ALMOST FINISHED Digital App (interactive ebook) "Kitty Wants"? Click on this link! I have to finish and submit it today (gotta hurry) so I'll be working on it til it's finished! Fyi, pretend you're 5 and click on everything!

http://publish.talespring.com/shared/books/1934/2372